Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Should children be encouraged to listen to or read news early on?

Question)

Is it important for a leader to be a good speaker?

 

1st Answer)

I think it’s good for children to follow the news early, and I have two reasons for that.

 

First, it helps them learn about different jobs. When I was young, I didn’t have a dream. But after watching news channels like CNN, I learned about jobs like engineers and scientists. I was inspired by how engineers solve problems, and that helped me find my dream.

 

Second, I learned how to understand the world better. When I was young, I used to see things only from my own point of view. But watching the news helped me see different sides of a story and understand other people’s opinions. It made me more open-minded and thoughtful.

 

For these reasons, I agree that children should follow the news early. It really helps their growth.

 

1st Feedback)

문장구조는 좋지만 한국식 억양이 많이들린다. 모든 문장구조 조금 더 짧게하고 발음에 신경쓰면서 억양은 없애보기 추천.

 

2nd Answer)

I think it’s good for children to follow the news early for two reasons.

 

First, it helps them learn about different jobs. When I was young, I didn’t have a dream. But after watching news channels like CNN, I knew about engineers and was inspired by how engineers solve problems. And it helped me find my job.

 

Second, I learned how to understand the world better. When I was young, I used to see things only from my own point of view. But watching the news helped me see different sides of a story and understand people’s opinions.

 

For these reasons, I agree that children should follow the news early.

 

2nd Feedback)

문장구조 및 억양을 없애니 좋아졌는데 inspired, opinions, understand같은 경우 억양이 이상함.

한 번 녹음해준거 들어보고 연습해보고 r발음 신경 spire, opini 신경쓰기

 

Self Feedback)

inspired에서 p는 ㅃ처럼 들리는 구조, opinion에서 p는 강한 ㅍ발음으로 들림